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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The histogram showcases the percentages of
residents
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 consuming and drinking
coffee
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 and tea
by
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in
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three
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seperated
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separated
separate
 ways in five
cities
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 in Australia. Generally speaking, the least people have bought fresh
coffee
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 in
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last
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 4 weeks among
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three
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the three
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while
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 the quantity of individuals going to a café for
coffee
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 or tea is the highest in almost
overall
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cities
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. Sydney,
Melboune
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Melbourne
 and Hobart have seen more
residents
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 buying fresh
coffee
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 or going to a café than the other two
cities
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.
It is clear that
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 buying fresh
coffee
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 was the least popular habit among the five
cities
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, since the highest percentage of a city’s
residents
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 choosing
this
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 method, which is slightly underneath 45% in Sydney, is lower than the lowest percentage of
other
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the other
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 two habits. Four
cities
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 out of five
prefered
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preferred
 consuming
coffee
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 or tea in a café the most, except Adelaide, where the number of people buying instant
coffee
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 exceeds by a small margin. The percentages of
residents
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 of Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart are greater than those in Brisbane and Adelaide between the action of buying fresh
coffee
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 and the action of going to a café.
According to
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 the chart, the percentages of the
three
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cities
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 of
residents
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 consuming drinks in a café
are
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all surpass 60%, and the according statistics
of
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for
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 buying fresh
coffee
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 are greater than 35% as well,
whereas
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 neither of the other
cities
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 conformed with the two statements.
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, as for the habit of buying instant
coffee
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, Brisbane and Adelaine are among the top
three
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cities
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 , whose statistics are just slightly under Hobart’s 62%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words residents, coffee, three, cities, café with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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