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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

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Nowadays more and more people are migrating to urban areas for better
life style
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lifestyle
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 and education.
This
 circumstance has caused overpopulation which is the biggest
problem
 for cities.
This
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problems
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the problems
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 of
this
 and offer some solutions.     In my opinion, the main
problem
 of overpopulation is increasing prices of everyday needs and housing. In urban
areas
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 the land is becoming less available because of
overmoving
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over moving
 to cities and causes
growing
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growth
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 of
the
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apply
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housing prices.
For example
, in
Tashkent
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,Tashkent
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 the price of flats has increased
nearly
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 50% and it is expected to grow more in the future. Another
problem
 is traffic jams which force people to wait for hours.
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, in our city traffic congestion is becoming more usual, because today more and more people are using their cars.     To solve
issues
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 that
discribed
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described
 above, there are several solutions.
Firstly
, to decrease prices for housing governments should encourage construction companies to construct cheaper houses or to set up their bases in
near by
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nearby
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 suburbs.
Secondly
, improving
public
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the public
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 transport system is not only
of
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the best way to overcome traffic jams
,
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but
also
 it helps to reduce
noise
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the noise
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problem
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problems
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 in urban areas.     In conclusion,
overpopulating
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overpopulation
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 is becoming a serious issue in cities. If we don't find solutions to tackle
this
problem
, there are would be bigger issues.
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  • public services
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  • inadequate healthcare services
  • pressure on educational institutions
  • environmental impact
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  • waste management
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  • natural habitats
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