Ques: Being a celebrity- such as a famous film star or sports personality – brings problems as well as benefits Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?
Some
of
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people
thought being Add an article
the people
celebrity
like Add an article
a celebrity
as
a famous film star or sports personality Change preposition
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bringing
problems and benefits to others. Here is my perspective thought about being Wrong verb form
brings
celebrity
and what is my knowledge about them.
Nowadays, being famous in our society Add an article
a celebrity
are
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is
one
of the main source
of becoming more active in social media Change to a plural noun
sources
such
as idolizing them when it comes to what clothes you are wearing, what there are activities to do in everyday
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your everyday
lives
and Fix the agreement mistake
life
people
are
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adapting
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adopting
this
personality. In addition
, people
with
facing neurological Change preposition
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problem
like Fix the agreement mistake
problems
one
of the most is depression are
getting a good source for them Change the verb form
is
in
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apply
celebrity
, they are absorbing good hormones or Fix the agreement mistake
celebrities
happy
sides of watching or listening to their Correct article usage
the happy
favorite
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favourite
celebrity
and forgetting the bad thoughts of being alone or thinking of some bad kind of things for themselves,
In my opinion, famous celebrity
are understandable to idolize Fix the agreement mistake
celebrities
them
if it is getting a good example; but somehow they are Correct pronoun usage
apply
one
of the reason
why some Change to a plural noun
reasons
people
or especially young age are copying them are
not good effect Unnecessary verb
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for
them Change preposition
on
such
as because of their popularity, young age think of doing like their actions are okay to our society, how we treat our parents and some of people
, they think it's okay not to study become famous Add an article
the people
one
is the answer to have a better future and most
worst effect they suddenly thinking hurting themselves lead to Change the adjective
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have
depression.
In conclusion, being Change the verb form
having
famous
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a famous
celebrity
it's okay but you need to be aware a
good example to Change preposition
of a
people
, think twice as much as they can before doing such
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a thing
thing
with moderation and more Fix the agreement mistake
things
benefitted
. As I mentioned before idolizing Replace the word
benefits
of
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apply
celebrity
are risk of having a problem and leads to depression Fix the agreement mistake
celebrities
however
they can give also
a good side to others.Submitted by cristelsarondo on
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