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Some people have to find work abroad .they have to leave theirs homes as well as friends. Do the advantages outweight the disadvantage.

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Some individuals have to go for aboard for work
then
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 they have
left
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 their house parents and friends. There is plenty of merits and demerits of leaving
home
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the home
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of
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 a Job. In
this
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 essay let us discuss the both merits and demerits.
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 with the primary benefits of working in developed
countries
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 or cities. When an individual
work
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works
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in
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oversees
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overseas
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 they get high salaries
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 of
month
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. By comparing the developing
countries
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.
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, the monthly salary is 4000 in Australia and 400 in Kenya so
its
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it's
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 10 times higher
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 is the reason all individuals move to developed
countries
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.
Secondly
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 another privilege they can get the
change
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chance
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 to learn
the
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about the
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 different
culture
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cultures
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,
environment
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environments
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,
foods
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and foods
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, and
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, they can break the communication barrier as well. They socially mingle with
the
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society and
fell
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feel
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as
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like
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 home
place
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places
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 and
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countries
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country
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. In recent times migrants get more benefits they buy
the
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a
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 house and car,
most
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the most
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 important thing
they
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is they
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fell
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feel
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 very
secured
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 they live here as a family.
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Conversely
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the
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language and accommodation might be the biggest barrier they will face it. They can
fell
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feel
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 alone at all times even if are earning more money. They will lose all
the
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apply
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contact in
the
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their
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 native place.
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: If they stay long in aboard will
forgets
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forget
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a
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their
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friend
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friends
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 and
the
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their
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 local contacts in
the
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their
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 native place. In my view conclusion there are more benefits
in
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the
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overseas. They can lot money by comparing the current
countries
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 and
also
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, they can achieve what they want in short terms
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