Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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One of the areas that governments must invest in is the
transportation
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sector. Some people believe that they should spend more money on the
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railways
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railway's
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section than
the
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the section of the road
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roads
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section. It
is disagreed
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disagrees
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that governments should spend money on
railways
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. One area of
transportation
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is good
transportation
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. There are several reasons that road
transportation
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is more important than railway
transportation
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.
Firstly
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, the amount of time
in
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on
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road
transportation
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is much more than
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on railways
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railways
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railway
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and
its
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it's
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because of the speed and routes.
For example
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,
for
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apply
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delivery
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of somthing
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somthing
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something
railway takes one week,
however
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,
this
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time for the road is about three or four days. So, to transfer some goods like a diary that have an expiration date,
it
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might take lots of loss.
Secondly
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, the size of some goods
are
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huge and it is impossible to transfer them
with
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by
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railways
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railway
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.
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, there are some limitations
for
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constructing
railways
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and
at
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in
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some
places
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it is impossible to build
railways
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.
Other
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area of
transportation
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is for passengers. By comparing the
amount
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number
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of people which can be transported by
railways
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with
roads
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, the number of passengers
for
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by
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railways
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is much more than
roads
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. Safety is another subject that matters, and
railways
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are safer than
roads
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,
due to
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the speed limit and there are no other trains where accidents can happen.
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if some
railways
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are destroyed, virtually
other train
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another train
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can't
across
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from that, and
this
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can't happen for
roads
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because there are more
alternative
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alternatives
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.
Consequently
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, by comparing two sectors of
transportation
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,
roads
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and
railways
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, for goods and passengers, we find out the advantages of
roads
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are more than
railways
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. And I disagree with
this
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statement that governments should spend money on
railways
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rather than
roads
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.
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  • Efficiency
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