Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

One of the areas that governments must invest in is the
transportation
sector. Some people believe that they should spend more money on the
railways
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railway's
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section than
the
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the section of the road
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roads
section. It
is disagreed
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that governments should spend money on
railways
. One area of
transportation
is good
transportation
. There are several reasons that road
transportation
is more important than railway
transportation
.
Firstly
, the amount of time
in
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road
transportation
is much more than
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on railways
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railways
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and
its
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because of the speed and routes.
For example
,
for
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delivery
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of somthing
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somthing
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something
railway takes one week,
however
,
this
time for the road is about three or four days. So, to transfer some goods like a diary that have an expiration date,
it
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might take lots of loss.
Secondly
, the size of some goods
are
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huge and it is impossible to transfer them
with
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railways
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railway
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.
Finally
, there are some limitations
for
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constructing
railways
and
at
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some
places
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it is impossible to build
railways
.
Other
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area of
transportation
is for passengers. By comparing the
amount
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of people which can be transported by
railways
with
roads
, the number of passengers
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railways
is much more than
roads
. Safety is another subject that matters, and
railways
are safer than
roads
,
due to
the speed limit and there are no other trains where accidents can happen.
While
if some
railways
are destroyed, virtually
other train
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another train
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can't
across
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from that, and
this
can't happen for
roads
because there are more
alternative
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.
Consequently
, by comparing two sectors of
transportation
,
roads
and
railways
, for goods and passengers, we find out the advantages of
roads
are more than
railways
. And I disagree with
this
statement that governments should spend money on
railways
rather than
roads
.
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  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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