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The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one coutry, by age group and location of residence, in 2016.

The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one coutry, by age group and location of residence, in 2016.
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The line graph provides information about the use of public
transport
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 in a particular area, by age group and location of residence, in 2016. Units are measured in percentage.
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, it is visible from the given view that public
transport
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 was common for the Large city residents almost for every age group.
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, Other residents did not prefer using public
transport
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 much in that area in the given period. Commence with the Large city community, 40% of 15-year-old children used buses or the subway to reach their destination,
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 the percentage using
transport
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 increased to above 60% by citizens aged 16 to 45.
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, individuals above 45 to 75 did not want to use public transportation, and the proportion decreased dramatically by 10% in 1026.
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, older people who were at their 76 and more chose buses and other transits rather than private ones shoving around 10%. Now, focus on the details of Other residents, just about 10% of children aged 15 used public
transport
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, except for 16-30-year old adults who used it with a percentage of about 20%, and again after the age of 31-76 and even older used it 10%
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, in that country in 2016.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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