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Task 2: Some people think secondary school students should learn international news as one of their subjects, while others believe that this is a waste of valuable time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A number of individuals believe that international
news
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 should be taught as one of their obligatory courses in secondary
schools
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.
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 some others think that the secondary
students
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' time will waste by
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 issue. In
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 essay, I would discuss both issues and
afterward
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 give my idea about them. On one hand, at the
first,
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One group believe that in
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 contemporary era, international
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,
are
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is
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 not useful. All the social media and TV channels have been including
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bad
news
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 and it is not good for
students
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' spirits. It can have some negative effects on their efficiency of learning.
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,
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 group of people claim that the interesting field of every student is individual.
schools
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 should give
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 right of choosing their major by themselves and they learn everything that they want and the
compulsary
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compulsory
 should not exist in their lessons.
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, they do not interested in
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 in
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 part of their life. they should have more fun and enjoyable subjects like dancing and singing courses. So
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 kind of
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make
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 them unhappy.
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hand
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 some people think that it is crucial for every young person to know about what is happening in the universe. in the other words, they believe that knowing about international
news
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 will make them aware
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 some important items.
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 politics, environmental issues, cultural awareness and other items in the world.
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, they will have lots of benefits if they learn about nations'
news
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 in their secondary
schools
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.
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 it is a good idea to know about what is happening in the universe, I think it is not important for the
students
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 in their teenth to learn about it. It can be optional for them if they
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 in
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 field to know more about it. In conclusion, in
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article
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 both sides of the idea
about
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of
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 learning
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news
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the news
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of
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about
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 the current affairs of
world
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the world
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 by secondary
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schools'
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 pupils are investigated. In my opinion, teaching these kinds of
news
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 is not necessary
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 step of
students
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' life.
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