The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s.
These two pie charts depict the major sources of
power
in the eighth and ninth decades in
the Change preposition
of
20s
century in the United States. It is clear from the graph that depending on oil energy dropped throughout the period of time.
Correct your spelling
20th
According to
what is shown, in the 1980s, oil took the highest percentage of the whole usage. where natural gas was the second largest source which was about a quarter. For coal, it had a small minority of all
the proportion. Correct determiner usage
apply
Lastly
, nuclear power
,
and hydroelectric Remove the comma
apply
power
were a tiny fraction and they represented the same ratio (5%).
On the other hand
, in the 1990s, a lots
of figures and employment of Correct the article-noun agreement
a lot
lots
power
changed. Natural gas did not show any obvious changed
, so it decreased modestly by 1%. Change the form of the verb
change
Secondly
, oil consumption as a
energy substantially dropped where it got Remove the article
apply
one third
of all the ratio. Coal and nuclear Add a hyphen
one-third
power
were the only two which climbed thier
figures. Ultimately, hydroelectric Correct your spelling
their
power
sustained at the same level by 5% mark.
To sum up
, we could say that some of the sources of power
had been aviouded
in the 1990s when they Correct your spelling
avoided
sinked
. And some others like coal and nuclear Correct your spelling
sinned
power
became more popular.Submitted by hhh7c8 on
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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