The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The table provides data from
United
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Nations
centre
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of
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on key social and economic
indeces
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indices
indexes
for Canada,
Japan
, Peru and Angola in the year 1994.
It is clear that
Japan
was the leading
country
. Annual income per capita in
this
East
country
accounted for 15760 US dollars,
while
this
index in Canada accounted only for 11100 US dollars.
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it is remarkable, that the average length of life in
Japan
was the highest one (78 years). East people consumed a little bit
less
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calories than Canadians (2846 and 3326 daily per person respectively). Probing
further
, the poorest
country
was Angola, where personal income per year was only 130 US dollars and each person consumed only 1749 calories per day. Remarkable, that the level of literacy depends on the common weal of
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society. Almost every Canadian or Japanese was literate (99 per cent in each
country
),
while
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of the nation was able to read in Angola.
Overall
, there is a
colleration
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correlation
between economic and social indicators.
While
developed countries like
Japan
and Canada keep
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and
prosper
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prospering
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, developing
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have problems in social spheres of life.
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