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The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010
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the bar chart shows the proportion of female and male
drivers
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 passing their driving test in one country in Asia over 30 years starting from 1980.
overall
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, it is evident that the year 2020 was the leading year with the highest rate,
while
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 1980 experienced the opposite trend.
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, more female
drivers
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 were passing their driving test than those male
drivers
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 and the percentage of passed
drivers
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 witnessed a dramatic increase in
this
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 period. on the one hand, there was a massive rise in the proportion of female
drivers
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 in the first 20 years of
this
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 period. It rose almost 30% from 1980 to 2000 and
then
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 see a slight decrease in 2010 around 2%.
on the other hand
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, turning to the other gender, it is clear from the graph that the proportion of male
drivers
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 passing their driving test experienced a sharp growth ranging from approximately 28% to 49% in 1980,2010 respectively.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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