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Nowasays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life What are the reasons? Is this a positive or negative trend?

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It is becoming increasingly common for people to postpone having
children
. In my view,
this
 should be perceived as a positive trend for 2 main reasons. The major reason is
parents
 need to be financially stable. Having
children
 has a great responsibility, it means it is a must for
parents
 to take care of them and fulfil their needs. By having financially stable, a couple can prepare well for the
children
's needs, education, and future. Being well-prepared in financial will help in avoiding economical issues.
Consequently
, it offers a bright future for the
children
. For illustration,
children
 that have better education will get better opportunities for academic success. The next reason is
parents
 need parenting
skills
 before having
kids
. Parenting
skills
 will be helpful for married couples in order to raise their
kids
. It will be hard for couples that have no basic knowledge of taking care of their
children
. By having parenting
skills
,
parents
 can bond easily and have a healthy relationship between
parents
and
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children
.
Thus
, it will shape the
children
's personalities and abilities in society.
For instance
,
kids
 that have good relationships with their
parents
 will easily become a part of society. Their
parents
 teach them how to behave and respect others.
To sum up
, many people postpone having
kids
 because consider financially stable and have parenting
skills
.
However
, I am firmly convinced that it will be better for
parents
 to prepare well both financially and
skills
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 before having
kids
 in order to build a good relationship in
family
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