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Some people believe that violence in the media, such as in television programs and films, directly results in violent behavior. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some individuals argue that aggressive
behavior
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 is a definite consequence of
violence
 broadcasted in tv programs and movies. I disagree
to
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 the given notion and
this
 essay will discuss the reasons
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 my disagreement.
Firstly
, People do realise that the fights and disputes shown on television programs are unreal. It means, in the present world, even youngsters are
also
 aware that the offences shown in the media
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 just for entertainment purpose, it has no relevance to reality.
Consequently
, no behavioural effects of
such
 violent content are experienced
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 on adults
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on
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youngsters.
For instance
, now we all understand that WWE fights are unreal and exclusively for entertainment purposes.
Hence
, practically do not adapt their moves in practical
life
.
Hence
, it does not affect their
behavior
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 no matter whatsoever.
Secondly
, people nowadays are more educated than ever before and they understand the adverse consequences of adopting a behavioural change from a fight program or an action movie. Rather, other factors
such
 as personal
life
 concerns and domestic
violence
 turn an individual into arrogant.
For instance
, an innocent child raised in a family with domestic fights is highly likely to become violent in adulthood.
Hence
, practical
life
violence
 leaves a significant impact on a person's
behavior
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 rather than watching a fight program. Conclusively,
violence
 shown in the media does not turn their individual
behavior
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 into aggressive. Rather practical
life
 instances do have an undeniable influence.
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