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The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008

The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008
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The main pie chart gives us pieces of data about the
consumption
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 of different categories of
food
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 around the
world
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as well as
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 in
China
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 and
India
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 in 2008.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 processed meal was the category of
food
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 the most popular on earth in the year 2008.
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, for the other
categories
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 some differences can be seen. Indeed, processed
food
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 represented 41% of the
world
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's average
consumption
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.
India
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 confirms
this
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 trend with
a
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consumption
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 of
this
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 type of
food
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 equal to 39%.
However
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 a decrease can be observed in
China
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, processed
food
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 represented 34% of sources of
consumption
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 of
food
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. In the
world
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 and in
China
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, vegetables and fruits represented the second source of
food
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consumption
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 with 29% and 32% respectively. Animal
food
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 was the second source of alimentation for
India
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 with 27% of the total
consumption
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while
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 it was the third source in the
world
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 representing 26% of the global
consumption
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. Nuts and seeds were not extremely popular in the
world
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 representing 4% of global
consumption
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.
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, in
China
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, it was the third origin of alimentation with 19%
whereas
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 in
India
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 it represented 11% of
food
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consumption
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, food, world, china, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 4 times.
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