In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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In
this
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modern era, many
people
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prefer to hire a professional
fitness
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trainer
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, rather than
joining
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gym classes or playing sports. There are some reasons why
people
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choose a personal
trainer
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and I think the benefits of
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development are more significant
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will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
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with, some
people
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may want to be private when they doing
exercise
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and a private
sport
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trainer
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could more focus to help trainees when they doing
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sports. First of all, some
people
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might get many
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when they go to
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sport
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classes.
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,
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may
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not feel comfortable in
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crowded place
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as public sports. Since many
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will
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going
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to the place,
people
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will choose
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a private class
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so they can focus on training.
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, if
people
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have a private teacher in
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, the trainers could help the trainees intensively and tell them how to do
exercise
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such
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as using
fitness
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tools
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in the right way.
As a result
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,
people
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could maintain their
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using the
tools
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.
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, the trend of hiring
personal
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a personal
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guide
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in
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gives two benefits.
First,
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people
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could avoid accidents when they
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fitness
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through
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following
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guidance from
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professional. Many accidents could happen
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when
people
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go to the gym.
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is because they do not know how to use the
tools
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.
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, hiring a professional
trainer
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is the solution to tell
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how to utilize
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gym
tools
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. The
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benefit is
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will have a special schedule from the
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. The muscles that
people
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train after several times need a break time. Because of that
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could give the information about what days they should
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exercise
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in order to build their bodies properly.
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, the reason that
people
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use professional
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trainer
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trainers
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is
because
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they want to have a private space when they doing training to avoid distraction from others and the
trainer
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could help the trainee intensively when they want to use special
sport
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tools
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. I think the personal guide could give benefits namely to avoid accidents
while
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training and give special schedule to doing
exercise
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personalized workout plans
  • tailored
  • efficient
  • awareness
  • physical health
  • motivation
  • guidance
  • convenience
  • flexibility
  • exclusivity
  • status symbol
  • inaccessible
  • community engagement
  • social interaction
  • health outcomes
  • personal achievement
  • health-conscious
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