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Nowadays, the most important task is the protection of the environment for future generations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#protection #environment #future #generations
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Global Warming is known as the phenomenon that
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increase
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 temperatures of
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 mainly because of human activity,
for
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greenhouse gas emissions.
For
this
 reason, nowadays the most important task is the protection of the environment for future generations, but how do we achieve
such
 a challenge? In my opinion, it is mandatory to find the mechanisms that allow all countries to reduce fossil fuels.
Hence
, The Paris Agreement
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emerged
 in 2015 to
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 assist its signatories to effectively and efficiently manage policies to drop greenhouse gas emissions.
For example
, to foster the use of alternative energies. Alternative energies,
such
 as eolic or solar have arisen lately. Huge
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photovoltaic
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frames
farms
 have been set
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 many
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countries around
 the globe, allowing
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 of electricity to be
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 and distribute along places. They have taken advantage of the wing through eolic technology as well.
Moreover
, electric cars have become very popular,
also
 avoiding CO2 emissions. As a matter of fact, nowadays, there are several countries that will forbid the
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 of fossil fuel
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vehicles
. In
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conclusion
, we world
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 started to implement policies to reduce
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global warming and
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therefore
 protect the earth for future generations. I truly hope
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 that the efforts to
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reduce
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the temperatues
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temperatues
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temperatures
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 of the planet are enough to let us all hand out mother nature to the following generations.
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