some people believe that ghosts are real. Some others say they are an illusion. Give your opinion.

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Was believed by some people that ghosts

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others

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they were an illusion. I partially agree with

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statement.

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with, supernatural stories have been narrated around the world since childhood regardless of region or belief. Several unexplained situations are not only scary but

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draw probably most attractions of individuals since the medieval ages.

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, Dracula, a vampire who lives by drinking blood and mostly has a longevity life, appeared in a large number of Hollywood films.

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, supernatural people have been found in many countries who keep

telling

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that they can communicate with the underworld.

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, the individual

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as a medium can explain the truth of an unresolved case by seeking help from the invisible victim after the police verify the information and it

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true.

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, some ghost tales have already been solved by modern exorcists or scientists that it was merely a scientific phenomenon or man-made situation.

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, the unexplained events that have been found on the internet are mostly

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prank

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set up by locals and the evidence that insists

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the ghost always are recorded in low resolution or quality. What’s more, the more famous the haunt stories are, the more engagement the location will be received.

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, the tale of the Lockness monster invites huge tourists to explore any country every year despite finding nothing for several years.

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although

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the increase of haunt events still

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member

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of society, there

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various

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that

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solved by truth

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Coherence and cohesion

Your essay addresses the topic of belief in ghosts but could benefit from a clearer structure. Ensure that your introduction introduces your main points and your conclusion summarizes them. Use topic sentences to guide the reader through each paragraph.

Coherence and cohesion

Good use of examples to support your points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

260 words

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some people believe that ghosts are real. Some others say they are an illusion. Give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

young people who commit serious crimes, such as a robbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree

In some countries, online shopping is replacing shopping in stores. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

The unlimited use of cars may cause problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars? Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.