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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph represents the
amout
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amount
 of holidaymakers who
traveled
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travelled
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a
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to a
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Caribbean
island
by
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between
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 the year
of
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apply
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2010 to 2017.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the total
number
 of
tounists
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tourists
 saw a dramatic increase from
i
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I
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millions
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million
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 in 2010 to3.5
millions
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million
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 in 2017. The
visitors
 who
traveled
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travelled
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 were divided into two categories. One of them
were
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was
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 the
people
 who chose to stay on
cruise
ships
,the rest
prefered
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preferred
 to stay on
island
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the island
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. Both the
number
 of them experienced a rise.
Befor
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Before
 in the middle of 2015,
people
 were likely to stay on
island
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the island
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. There were 0.5
milions
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million
millions
 of them in 2010.The following year, the
number
leveled
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levelled
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 off. After 2011, the quantities of
people
 staying on
island
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the island
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 saw a gradual
grouth
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growth
 to1.5
millions
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million
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 in 2013 and have
millons
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millions
 in 2013 and have
remamned
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remained
 level for three years.
while
 it
esperiend
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experienced
 a fall in 2016,the
number
 of those
people
 increased again and reached 1.5
millions
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million
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 in 2017.
In contrast
,before 2016,the
number
 of
visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
 was less
fhan
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than
 that of
vistors
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visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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.In 2010,there were
onry
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only
 0.25
milions
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million
millions
 of those
people
. And
then
 the
number
 of them increased to 0.5
milions
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million
 in 2011.But it fell back to the original
fingure
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figure
 in 2012. From
then
 on, the
quantites
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quantities
quantity
 of
visitors
 who chose
stay
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to stay
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 on
cruise
ships
 have been increasing
draticauly
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dramatically
drastically
. In the middle of 2015, the
number
 of
travelers
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travellers
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 staying on
cruise
ships
 overtook that of
visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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. By 2017,the amount of
visitors
 who stay on
craise
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cruise
ship
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ships
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has
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had
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 reached 2
millions
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million
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, number, millions, visitors, people, cruise, ships with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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