The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.

The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.
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The bar chart highlights data about the worldwide trade of various types of digital gambles between 2000 and 2006
Overall
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, it can be seen from the graph that at the beginning there were two types of
games
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handheld and console
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at the end
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of the
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duration there were 4 different kinds of activities
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as mobile, online, handheld and console.
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with, handheld
games
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began at 11, rising steadily during the first two years.
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, it soared in 2001, going up gradually unless it rocketed in the final year. Mobile phone
games
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appeared at over 1 in 2002, but
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they rose considerably for the rest of the period. In the final, it took third
place
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being at 7. Online
games
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witnessed the same movement as mobile phone
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starting at over 1 in 2002, and shooting up for the rest of the period.
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, it outnumbered mobile phone
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being at 10 which is in second
place
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. It’s clear that the only game which faced a downward trend is console
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. Console
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were in second
place
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getting at under 6, though they decreased gradually during the period.
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, it took the
last
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place
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