People nowadays prefer to interact online e g do shopping chat with friends rather than talking to other people face to face What are the reasons for this. Is this a positive or negative development?

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In the modern
world
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people
prefer to do a
lot
of things
such
as shopping and communicating with friends online. There are some reasons for these actions including technological progress and changes in modern
life
. As for me, I think that it is a rather good trend
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because it gives
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possibility to make more chores and
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the same
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always to keep in touch with friends and relatives. First of all, today
people
's
life
changes too often caused
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the invention
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invention
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new
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devices or just the new features for existing ones. When smartphones and different social media were not existing,
people
communicated offline and spent a
lot
of
time
in shopping centres, product shops and small boutiques.
However
, when these devices
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invaded
people
's
life
everything
was
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changed.
People
have realised that they don't need anymore waste so
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time
for
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the
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buying new thing,
for example
. Another reason underlies in the simple
conveniency
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convenience
of social media and other online services.
Therefore
,
this
development has a
lot
of advantages,
although
a
lot
of disadvantages as well.
To begin
, online interactions help
people
to save a
lot
of
time
, which their,
for example
, can spend with their families.
Moreover
, without online services and
communication
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it is nowhere like
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doing
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as much
stuffs
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stuff
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as without them.
For instance
, in my
childhood
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we spent almost
whole
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the whole
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Saturday
for
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buying the products for the week,
while
now I just order the delivery of all these products.
To sum up
, it seems like online
interacting
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is just a part of
people
's
adoptation
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adoption
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the
fast developed
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technological world. Even though some problems can be caused by online communication, it is mostly positive development and it facilitates modern
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instant messaging apps
  • social media platforms
  • convenience
  • customer reviews
  • multitask
  • fulfilling responsibilities
  • safety concerns
  • immersive technology
  • interactions
  • preference
  • necessity
  • substitute for face-to-face interactions
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