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People nowadays prefer to interact online e g do shopping chat with friends rather than talking to other people face to face What are the reasons for this. Is this a positive or negative development?

In the modern
world
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people
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 prefer to do a
lot
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 of things
such
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 as shopping and communicating with friends online. There are some reasons for these actions including technological progress and changes in modern
life
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. As for me, I think that it is a rather good trend
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 because it gives
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 possibility to make more chores and
in
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 the same
time
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 always to keep in touch with friends and relatives. First of all, today
people
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's
life
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 changes too often caused
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the invention
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invention
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new
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 devices or just the new features for existing ones. When smartphones and different social media were not existing,
people
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 communicated offline and spent a
lot
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 of
time
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 in shopping centres, product shops and small boutiques.
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, when these devices
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invaded
people
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's
life
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 everything
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changed.
People
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 have realised that they don't need anymore waste so
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time
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for
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the
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buying new thing,
for example
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. Another reason underlies in the simple
conveniency
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convenience
 of social media and other online services.
Therefore
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,
this
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 development has a
lot
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 of advantages,
although
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 a
lot
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 of disadvantages as well.
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, online interactions help
people
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 to save a
lot
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 of
time
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, which their,
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, can spend with their families.
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, without online services and
communication
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 it is nowhere like
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 as much
stuffs
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 as without them.
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, in my
childhood
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 we spent almost
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the whole
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 Saturday
for
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buying the products for the week,
while
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 now I just order the delivery of all these products.
To sum up
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, it seems like online
interacting
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 is just a part of
people
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's
adoptation
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adoption
for
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 the
fast developed
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 technological world. Even though some problems can be caused by online communication, it is mostly positive development and it facilitates modern
life
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instant messaging apps
  • social media platforms
  • convenience
  • customer reviews
  • multitask
  • fulfilling responsibilities
  • safety concerns
  • immersive technology
  • interactions
  • preference
  • necessity
  • substitute for face-to-face interactions
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