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Many people they spend large part of their free time using smartphones What do you think are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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One
 of the most conspicuous trends of today’s world is the colossal upsurge in the many
people
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 spend
large
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 part of their free
time
 using
smartphones
. There is a widespread worry that
this
 will only lead to a myriad of concerns in society. In my opinion, using
smartphones
 have
more
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 negative impact than positives in
the
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society. On the
one
 hand, critics may point out that
one
 of the most significant
benefit
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 of using
smartphones
are
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is
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 the
easy
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ease
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 to day to day work.
For example
,
people
 unlike in the past now have
more
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improve
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 their knowledge
as
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technical
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 side and any other
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.
On the other hand
, there are a number of arguments in
favor
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 of my stance.
One
 of the most preponderant ones is that many
people
they
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spend
large
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a large
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 part of their free
time
 using
smartphones
 have
some
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negative consequences for the community in various ways.
Firstly
, peoples waste their
time
 because
their
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they
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 involve
unnecessary
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in unnecessary
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 activities.
According to
, “times magazine December 2022 edition”, the proportion of wasting
time
 has Increased from 20% to 95% today.
Secondly
, a large portion of
the
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people
 unused their skills because
their
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of their
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 free
time
 using
smartphones
.
Lastly
, in my opinion, the government of Australia is taking a great initiative in educating its
people
 on the impact of using
smartphones
.
People
,
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 are being encouraged to spend a significant portion of their
time
 in
improve
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 knowledge in order to compensate for their free
time
 using
smartphones
. In
vies
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view
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 of the arguments outlined above,
one
 can conclude that despite having some benefits, the drawbacks of using
smartphones
 in
the
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society are indeed too dire to ignore.
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