You visited a hotel last week and left some items behind. Write a letter to the manager stating 1. Details of your stay 2. How important the items are to you 3. How you would want the items to the sent to you

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Dear hotel manager, My name is Joanne Wu. I

have

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apply

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stayed in your hotel from

2nd

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the 2nd

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of July to

6th

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the 6th

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of July, and the number of my room is 63A. I left my mobile

phone

in the room, and I am pretty sure I left it on the bed. The mobile

phone

means a lot to me,

this

is because my mother used to have the mobile

phone

for her daily use. She has taken

plently

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plenty

of pictures and

save

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saved

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them

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on her mobile.

However

, she already passed away, and her mobile

phone

is the only thing she has left

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for

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me.

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and my mother were very

closed

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, and I am very sad that I lost her mobile

phone

Therefore

, I am begging your hotel

staffs

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staff

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to find the mobile

phone

for me. If you find the mobile

phone

, can you please send it to

this

address: 6/39 Illawarra Street, Allawah, Sydney

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I am appreciated your help and look forward to finding the mobile

phone

soon. Thank you so much. Kind regards, Joanne Wu

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1Word repetition
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11Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

175 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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