In many countries, women are now able to join the armed forces on an equal basis. However, some people think only men should be members of the army, navy or air force. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Women

and

men

are becoming equal in almost everything in life. From families to society,

women

are holding many important positions and do it

as well as

men

, even better.

Although

there is no law that bans

women

from joining the armed

forces

, some people think only

men

should be members of the army, navy or air

forces

. I can hardly agree with

this

suggestion because the female can

also

be good on duty as other

men

. Despite having physical inferiority,

women

have the same ability on all other sides.

However

, if they have enough opportunities to

acces

Correct your spelling

access

hard training, their physical power can respond to the requirements of the armed

forces

Moreover

along with

the need for physical power, mental power

also

exists in many

women

’s virtue. So we can hardly deny the ability of females to attend to any

forces

In addition

women

are more suitable for some tasks like nursing or support. It is true that

women

are more careful and patient than

men

;

therefore

, female nurses in a force are much better than

men

Furthermore

, almost male soldiers prefer a female doctor to a male one. That seems like a joke but in a hard environment, humans

also

need psychological treatments. And In conclusion, the belief that only

men

can work in the military should be removed in our developed world. Both males and females are suitable for many different careers and

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In many countries, women are now able to join the armed forces on an equal basis. However, some people think only men should be members of the army, navy or air force. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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