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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
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The charts compare the amount of
water
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 used for
agriculture
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, industry, and homes around the world between 1990 and 2000, and the
water
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 use in
Brazil
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 and
Congo
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 in 2000. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that global
water
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 needs
increased
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 significantly over a period of 100 years, and
agriculture
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 made up the largest proportion of
water
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 used. It is
also
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 notable that
water
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 consumption was considerably higher in
Brazil
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 than in the
Congo
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. A deep analysis of the charts provided reveals that in 1900, around 500 km3 was used by the
agriculture
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 sector,
while
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 the data for industrial usage and domestic usage stood at around one-fifth of that amount. By 2000, global
water
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 purpose for
agriculture
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 rose significantly, at around 3000 km3,
whereas
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 industrial purposes accounted for just under half that amount, and domestic consumption
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 saw a gradual growth to 500 km3. Looking at the charts in more detail, it can be seen that in the year 2000, the populations of
Brazil
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 and
Congo
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 were 176 million and 5.2 million respectively.
Water
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 consumption per person in
Brazil
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, at 359 m3, was much higher than that in the Democratic Republic of
Congo
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, at 8 m3.
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, the use of
water
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 for irrigated land in
Brazil
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 was 26.5 times higher than that in
Congo
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, with 26.500 km3 and 100 km3 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, agriculture, brazil, congo, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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