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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The maps
reveals
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reveal
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changes
of
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in
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 Islands based on tourist facilities.
It is clear that
 one of the main
changes
of
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on
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 the
island
 is building infrastructure. Before the
island
 did not
had
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have
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 any buildings to attract tourists. The main goal of
changes
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change
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 developing tourism
in
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on
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 the
island
. The
island
 has
developed
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been developed
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 by manufacturing involves building homes,
restaurant
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restaurants
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,
pier
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a pier
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 and
reception
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a reception
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.
Furthermore
, there were laid
footpath
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footpaths
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 and vehicle
track
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tracks
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. The footpath is running from the restaurant and finishes at the pier.
Moreover
,
in
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 the
island
was
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apply
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built more than ten residence buildings and yachts for tourists. Before the
island
 had only
few
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a few
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 trees and
the
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a
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 beach, now the
amount
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number
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 of trees did not
have
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apply
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any
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apply
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changes
,
whereas
 the beach is applicable for swimming . Accommodations were built
at
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on
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 different sides of the
island
,
in
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and in
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 the middle of homes were
also
 manufactured
reseption
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reception
 and
restaurant
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restaurants
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words changes, island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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