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some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. they say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirnment. to what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

#people #waste #homes #governments #requirnment #laws
In today’s consumerism lifestyle making a large amount of waste from home is common. Regarding
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 some
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 in the government’s role and making laws for more reusable products. I tend to believe that
although
 the government can partly control
people
’s
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with
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 enforcing laws, mainly
people
 can revise themselves if they educate well.
However
, the government can force
people
 to do their responsibilities when they do not take actions of their own accord. By
this
 I mean, consumerist households who buy and use a lot of products at home and do not care about dividing recyclable things into separate bins can be fined with legal laws. Governors
additionally
 can use their power and put up taxes
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 houses with large numbers of disposable products
such
 as plastic containers. Governments that are more democratic prefer to act in a moderate way. Their policy may take a long time but it is more influential. Indeed, their major investment is in
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 generation’s education;
therefore
, adolescents who are
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 part of
this
 group can appreciate the huge burden
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themselves, so they will be more aware of
consequences
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 of their useful acts for the environment
such
 as recycling and they can make an effort to inform
people
, the first of which is their family.
To sum up
, despite the government’s authority in making hard conditions for
people
 to use less harmful stuff to the environment, individuals particularly in their adolescence can be more impressed by the authorities who allocate their power to inform the youth in logical ways.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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