In most countries, children wear uniforms to school. Some people argue that this is not a good idea. Discuss and give your own opinion.

There are arguments spreading over
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society that studying
English
is more essential rather than studying the native
languages
. They (The local language) may be in danger of extinction if
people
do not learn about it. In my opinion,
people
need to learn
English
, but at the same time, we need to keep the local
languages
.
To begin
with, there is a benefit gained by us (dihilangkan saja, pemborosan kata, terus passive sentence itu pronoun-nya sudah jelas, jadi gak perlu pakai "by us" lagi) by learning
English
. The main one is that it will be easier for
people
to get a
high quality
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job in the future. It is because there are a lot of occupations which need (ganti dengan
sinonim
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synonym
lainnya)
English
requirements.
For instance
, managerial or supervisory jobs often require job candidates to speak
English
well.
As a result
, the ones who get accepted are mainly
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good
English
speakers. It is
also
a
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general knowledge that when we are accepted in
this
kind of position, the income is definitely far different from the lower position. It is because the higher position jobs we get, the more salary we obtain.
As a result
, our welfare rate increases.
However
, (
However
itu biasanya antar
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paragraph
, kalau mau beda
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paragraph
para graf
pakai
on the other hand
,
on the contrary
, etc.)
besides
having a great
skill
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at
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English
, we have to preserve our local
languages
since they are our national identity. There are various possible actions that could be taken in order to tackle
this
issue.
First,
the government should implement the regulations that each school must make native
languages
as
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their compulsory course since the
languages
can be easier to master if there is a teacher who teaches us (langsung aja "the students") about it.
In addition
,
family
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is the first teacher of each child so every family needs to teach their children to be used to speaking their local
languages
. It is because being good in a language needs a lot of practice, so our home is definitely the suitable place to do that since it is the place lived by our closest ones. By combining those remedies, we can preserve local
languages
. In conclusion,
although
getting
skill
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at
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the
English
language is necessary for
people
, we
also
need to protect our local
languages
by making it a mandatory lesson in schools and teaching it in our own
household
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.
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