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In many countries, schoolchildren are required to wear school uniforms. What are the advantages and disadvantages of enforcing uniforms in schools?

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Ever since the idea of formal schooling emerged, there
is
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has been
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 a conception of
school
uniforms
along with
 that. The
school
 children are supposed to wear the designed
school
 uniform during their
school
 hours.
This
 has been debated lately as it brings many merits and demerits to individuals.
This
 essay will elaborate on the advantages and disadvantages associated with the idea of
school
uniforms
.
To begin
 with, we all remember the feeling of dressing up in a
school
 uniform with a tied hairstyle during our
school
 days. As the name suggests,
this
 trend brings a lot of uniformity among the students and overcomes any type of
socio-economical
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 discrimination.
For instance
, students irrespective of their
economical
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 and social background, will wear the same attire and there will be no scope for discrimination.
This
 means that the rich and poor will wear the same attire ,
also
 the Hindus and Muslims will dress up in the same uniform.
However
, we value the
choice
 and consent of today's generation especially. Anything which is forced on Gen-Z can lead them to rebellious mode. The students should get the
choice
 in terms of the clothing they choose for themselves. It is irrefutable to say that clothing represents an important aspect of your identity and personality. It
also
 creates conflicts with their sexuality.
For example
, a girl might not choose to wear a skirt, she might choose to wear a
pant
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. Taking all
this
 into consideration,
school
uniforms
 brings a lot more advantages than disadvantages if given more
choice
.
This
 generation demands
choice
 and consent so if, that can be given with regard to
uniforms
,
then
 it can certainly bring more advantages to the table.
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