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In some countries, governments encourage businesses to move outside of the cities to solve the problems of housing and transport in the cities. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this policy?

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Although
 as per the governments, it is beneficial to do
businesses
 outskirts of the town, other
people
 consider that it can be detrimental. Some countries can have clean surroundings in the city and have more land to build flats and houses by encouraging
businesses
 to move outside but there are
also
 drawbacks to be taken into account.
Firstly
, one benefit of
businesses
 moving out of
city
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 is that residential
people
 live in
tidy
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 atmosphere.
This
also
mean
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 that they can live in
the
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 area where there have no air
pollutions
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 and no noise
pollutions
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pollution
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.
As a consequence
,
people
 live in
fresh
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a fresh
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environment
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 and less suffer from health issues.
Secondly
, transferring a business is advantageous because home builder finds places to build flats and houses. Many individuals,
for instance
,
have
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find
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 accommodations near
to
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relatives or any other temple.
Therefore
,
this
 policy makes them helpful to live near to
favorite
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 place.
On the other hand
,
on
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problem
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the problem
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 when
businesses
 move to
outer
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the outer
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 side of the town is that it potentially
increase
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 the transportation expenses of individuals.
For instance
,
people
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for people
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 who
have
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 not their own vehicle to commute to the office
then
 it might
difficult
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be difficult
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to
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 them to go there and they can depend on
the
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public
transportations
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transportation
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 or private vehicles. Another possible issue is that forest area is reduced by the shops and commercial buildings.
Hence
, animals, who live in
forest
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the forest
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, will be dead or move to another area to find their accommodations. In conclusion,
while
 some regions can benefit from some outside
businesses
, it can
also
 lead to transportation or accommodation problems for
people
 and it can even be harmful
for
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 animals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban congestion
  • Economic spillover
  • Population density
  • Infrastructure development
  • Rural areas
  • Quality of life
  • Commuting challenges
  • Job dissatisfaction
  • Significant investment
  • Uneven development
  • Business-centric
  • Housing crisis
  • Transport issues
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