The pie chart blow shows the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts compare the average household spending in
Japan
and
Malaysia
in terms of five important categories in 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
Japanese and Malaysian people spent the largest proportion of their budget on just three categories, namely food, housing and other goods and services.
Moreover
, the percentages of transport and health care in
Japan
were double the figures for
Malaysia
. In Malaysian households, the greatest proportion of spending was on housing, which represented 34%of the total expenditure,
while
in
Japan
, the figure for
this
category was just 21%. Japanese householders spent the largest amount of their income on other goods and services, at 29%.
Meanwhile
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the rate of spending
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this
category in
Malaysia
was slightly lower, at 26%. In terms of food, the percentages of expenses for both nations were relatively similar, at 27% for
Malaysia
and 24% for
Japan
. In both countries, the smallest proportion of spending was on health care. In
Malaysia
,
this
accounted for 3% of the total household expenses,
while
the figure for transport represented 10%. These figures were exactly doubled in
Japan
which were 6% and 20% respectively.
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