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There is too much noise in many public places in cities. What are the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve the problem?

#noise #places #cities
In
this
 contemporary epoch,noise is increasingly gaining
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momentum in crowded areas of
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urben
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urban
 centre.In my opinion,it will create a huge mess for civilians, who are residing in
town
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.In
this
 essay,I will discuss
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the solution
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solution
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 to mitigate
this
 scenario. Apparently , migration to
the
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suburb
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 areas and cities has become prominent nowadays. Prime reasons behind
this
 are people can get quality education,
plethora
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a plethora
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 of job opportunities.
Nevertheless
, citizens who have been living in cities have to face numbers of difficulties,which will hamper their
well being
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.There are various causes of unwanted sounds.First and foremost reason,as migration has been slurping with time,that leads to
residencial
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residential
 construction in
city
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area
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.
This
,
sound
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the sound
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 of
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 machine and other mechanical devices may produce
loud
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 noise.
Secondly
, there are countless dairy production factories
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located in the
center
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 of the town ,
Therefore
,it will impose
impose
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unwanted sound in
environment
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.
However
,there are countless reasons
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 noise in
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public place,though,it can be improved with help of
council
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the council
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.
Firstly
,
government
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the government
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 should not allow any industrial building construction in urban areas
instead
 it must be far away from public places.
Additionally
,
municipal
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the municipal
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corporation
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corporations
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 must pass the law that new projects will be restricted to
built in
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residencial
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residential
 lands .
To conclude
,it is
undeniable
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the undeniable
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 conviction that unwanted sounds in
mega cities
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is
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 at the pick.
Subsequently
, with
support
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 of Authorities, a society can get
paradigm
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 shift in
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