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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

#businesses #emphasise #products #development
The development in technology has led some businesses to generate new ideas
of
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 advertisement. In order to gain more popularity many businesses make people think that their
product
 is new
some how
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. There are multiple reasons for
this
 method of advertising. Individuals, nowadays, are more aware of the
product
, they are using.
For example
, shampoos are being used in everyday routine and they know which shampoo contains ingredients, like sulfur and other chemicals and how it has a bad
affect
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 on hair. To cope
up
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with
this
 problem shampoo companies are now making sulfate-free shampoos. On the second hand, companies emphasise more on new products
because
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 they need to give a reason to people to change their
exsisting
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existing
product
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products
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.
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example
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 if someone is using a particular
skin care
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skincare
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 routine, he needs a significant reason to switch to a new
skin care
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skincare
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product
, which is more
benefitial
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beneficial
 for his skin. Organisations need to put in more effort to make their
product
 different from
others'
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others
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. I believe it is a positive way of
advertisement
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advertising
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. It brings out
creativity
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 in small businesses and allows them to grow.
Furthermore
, it adds
the
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 variety of products and
give
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 more options to individuals, to buy something different. Companies
also
 benefit because everyone is trying to find a
product
that is
cost friendly
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 and somehow different from ordinary. In a developing world, there are
mutiple
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multiple
 options to explore new ways of advertisement. Even though better ways are still immerging, adding something new to a
product
 never gets old.
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  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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