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The given pictures compare how the area in New Zealand named Youngsville changed during a period of 25 years between 1980 and 2005.

The given pictures compare how the area in New Zealand named Youngsville changed during a period of 25 years between 1980 and 2005. It can be clearly seen that Youngsville experienced striking transformations with the most noticeable modifications being an industrialization process and the demolition of woodland.
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it is clear that
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 all of the trees to the south of the River Alanah associated with the wide range of houses were demolished in order to make way for
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 buildings
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 an industrial zone namely the host of Warehouse and Factories. Having said that, there were some significant areas which remained unchanged over the period shown. By way of illustration, School buildings, an Airport, Parking lot, etc…
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 still existed around state-of-the-art infrastructure in 2005. When it comes to the woodland to the north of the river, they reduced in size so that a Park emerged for recreational purposes.
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 the construction of Golf courses and Parking facilities which
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 replaced woodland. Another striking feature is that the Stadium was built in the top-right corner of the map followed by the extension of the railway line from the river to the north which was almost doubled in size.
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, there was the erection of Marina
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 located next to the railway station.

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