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Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way.

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Modren time makes
people
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's life easy to communicate with each other with the help of social
sites
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 it is agreed by some communities that all those
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 put a bad impact on the personal relationships of every and each individual ,
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 others have an opposing opinion. All the
sites
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 that are used to send messages or make calls are having a negative impact on
people
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's life.
People
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 are focusing more on the individual whom they meet on social
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 and have never seen in person.
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, they do not give attention to the person whom they meet all day.
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, relationships get broken. Often
people
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 put negative stories or comments on social
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 that do brainwash other
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.
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, it can be often seen that folk on social
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 keep barking at each other and judging them without any reason.
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 was not having any issues with babu man but
people
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 kept putting comments on each other stories they start to fight In conclusion, these
sites
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 have a bad impact on the younger community rather than giving them an opportunity to communicate with other
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