Write about the following topic. Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Workers in different sectors are expected to meet certain criteria. Some
employees
are required to abide by a strict dress code
where
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whereas
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other
companies
care about the worker's productivity. It is true that
companies
should focus on the employee's work, yet it is very important to look presentable. On one hand, an employee's comfort should be prioritized. Some
people
feel
better-accomplishing
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tasks in comfortable clothes rather than formal attire. In fact, some
companies
allow their
employees
to wear sweatpants around the office.
For instance
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a
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pioneering
company
that created a friendly environment for its workers. The
company
has attracted a lot of
employees
all around the world for its flexibility
that
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other organizations
are lacking
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.
On the other hand
, a person's appearance always reflects on the environment they are in. A
company
's dress code is an extension of
their
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identity, and it is always expected of
people
working for a specific organization to meet these requirements. When walking into a big cooperate
company
you will see all the
employees
dressed in formal attire. Indeed, it has been proven that psychologically a person's appearance
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how they are perceived by others, especially in a work environment. Some
companies
even ask their
employees
to cover up any tattoos or piercings, as it will not give a good impression
for
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the
people
they will work with. In conclusion,
although
there is no correlation between a person's attire and productivity, I still believe that maintaining a presentable appearance is very important to gain
people
's respect.
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