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The chart provides information about the maturing demography of the UK between 1985 and 2035 by making predictions.

The chart provides information about the maturing demography of the UK between 1985 and 2035 by making predictions.
The chart provides information about the maturing demography of the UK between 1985 and 2035 by making predictions.
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, virtually all countries`
population
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populations
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 will grow by 2035.Northern Ireland was at
the
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 lowest peak in 1985 and will likely experience upsurging
result
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results
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 at the same level
with
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UK
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the UK
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.
England
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 population had received precisely 15% by 1985 and it predictably will reach
to
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approximately 25 %.Both England and United Kingdom `s residents aged 65 and over indicate identical patterns in 1985
as well as
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 2035.Wales was at over 15% in 1985 and will experiment soaring by making it to the
the
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loftiest incident. In comparison,Scotland will dramatically
strecth
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stretch
stretched
 out to a quarter of
populace
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the populace
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.It is anticipated from the bar chart that
UK`s
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the UK`s
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 citizenry of retired people will significantly increase to about 25% by
2035
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 year.
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, Northern Ireland`s index will end up at below 25 %
as
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the same as Uk.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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