Many educational institutions give greater importance to subjects related to science and ignore subjects such as drama and literature. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative development?

In
education
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system
science
more
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is more
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important than literature and
history
. Most
students
chose
science
instead
of
history
since they tend to think that in
future
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the future
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science
can help more than
history
, I would say it has more positive development than negative. There are several reasons why
science
more
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is more
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popular than others.
Firstly
, lots of
students
tend to
chose
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science
and
this
tendency increased over the years.
For example
, In 2010, 53.1% of
students
in Australia took a year 12
science
subject,
it
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which
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had increased to 56.2% by 2019.
Secondly
,
students
usually study
science
to understand what
happening
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around them.
Finally
, studying
science
helps build scientific literacy and
ability
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the ability
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to understand
science
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news in daily life.
On the other hand
, people cannot live without
history
and literature since studying only
science
can be boring. People should remember
about
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our past,
history
and literature. Without historical
discoveries
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,discoveries
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humanity would never know about some secrets. If we had discoveries and news just about
science
our daily life will be really boring and monotonous. In conclusion,
discoverying
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discovering
discovery
science
has a lot of benefits but studying
history
also
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is also
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necessary.
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