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Band 5

People argue that investment in roads has more priority in comparison to public transportation.

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Some
people
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 argue that
investment
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 in
roads
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 has more
priopity
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priority
 in comparison to public transportation. In my opinion,
due to
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 global warnings about
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
environmental
 and
traffic
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issue
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issues
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 in big
cites
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cities
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, allocating funds to public transportation is more reasonable rather than
roads
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. On the one hand,
earth
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the earth
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 is suffering from lots of pollution issues that are caused by
cars
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. Private vehicles produce carbon dioxide that has
detrimental
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a detrimental
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 effect on the environment.
Government
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investment
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on
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in
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 public
transport
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 will increase the quality and coverage of
this
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 service, therefor
people
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 will be encouraged to use public
transport
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eventually
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and eventually
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 the number of
cars
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 decrease and
less
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fewer
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 harmful gases will be produced.
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, in Japan
government
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 allocates
much
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apply
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money to railways in
recent
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the recent
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decade
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decades
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. Statics show that after expanding the railways,
number
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the number
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 of
cars
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in
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on
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roads
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the roads
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 has
been
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dramatically decreased.
On the other hand
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, most of the big
cites
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cities
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 all over the world are suffering from heavy
traffic
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 jams. Each day
people
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's valuable time is wasted
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traffic
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in traffic
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.
Moreover
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,
cars
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 use more fuel in
traffic
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 in
compare
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comparison
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 to
normal
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a normal
the normal
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situation
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situations
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that
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which
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 will cause extra
cost
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costs
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. Public
transport
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 can be a wise solution to tackle
traffic
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issue
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issues
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.
Government
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investment
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on
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in
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 public
transport
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 can clear
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people
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people's
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 concerns about
quality
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the quality
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 and coverage of public transportation.
Government
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investment
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on
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in
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 public
transport
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 can expand the routes and points that are covered by buses and railways.
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Consequently
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people
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people's
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 demand
for
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apply
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using private vehicles will decrease and
traffic
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issue
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issues
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 will be solved. In conclusion, by considering
positive
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the positive
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 impact on both environment and
traffic
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issue
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issues
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 spending money on public
transport
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 is more important
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then
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than
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roads
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.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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