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You have recently been appreciated by a client. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter Describe the appreciation you have received. Describe the work you have done. Ask him for a raise.

#client #manager #appreciation #work #raise
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that I have been appreciated by a customer in our
last
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 project.
Firstly
, I would like to inform
about
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 the appreciation which I have received from them. They really liked our product hardware design and layout
especially
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 the mechanical enclosure.
Additionally
, they
also
 appreciated our way of coding and commenting on them. It was really helpful to them to add more logic on top of them.
Moreover
, they liked our testing
documents
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 format and want it for their internal testing.
Secondly
, I would like to mention my responsibility
in
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 that project. I was responsible for making firmware and QA testing of
prototypes
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 boards. In all duration, I have communicated with them and solved all major and minor bugs
of
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 software and hardware. I would say it was
really
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 challenging task for me.
However
, I enjoyed it.
Lastly
, I would like to request you for increasing my salary in
next
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 meetings. Since I have completed one of the milestones of your company in
time
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the time
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 period.
Additionally
, I will
also
 promise you that I will complete all the projects
in
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reliably and
timely
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. I would appreciate it if you could look into
this
 matter at your earliest convenience. Yours faithfully, Milav Soni
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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