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The table below shows population figures for four countries for 2003 and projected figure for 2025 and 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows population figures for four countries for 2003 and projected figure for 2025 and 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table compares and contrasts the
population
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 rates of Argentina, Indonesia , Italy and the Republic of Korea, during the
year
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 2003 ,and it
also
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forcasted
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forecasted
 mortality ratios'
of
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 2025 and 2050 in these nations.
Overall
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 , Indonesia had the highest
population
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 rates compared to
other
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the other
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 three nations , and it is
also
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 predicted that it can still continue to grow in the upcoming years.
Whereas
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, Italy had the lowest , and it will continue the same trend in the upcoming time periods.
To begin
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 with, 238
million
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population
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 figures were accounted on Indonesia in the initial
year
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 and it is predicted that it will have a 74
million
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 increase in
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mortality rates in 2050 .
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,
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the Republic of Korea was the second most populated nation compared to Argentina and Italy , and it made up 48
million
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 in 2003 ,and the data shows that it will remain the same in 2025 and 2050 ( 52
million
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) . Surprisingly , Argentina had the lowest
population
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 ratio in 2003 .
However
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 , it is projected that it will report a dramatic surge in their mortality ratios' and should reach 62
million
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 in 2050 .
While
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, Italy was the second most populated nation in
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2003 , and it recorded 54
million
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 in that
year
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 .
By contrast
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, the information illustrates that it will have a drastic fall in their
population
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 , and it might reach 45
million
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 in the
last
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year
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratios" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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