The table below shows how patients evaluated differnet services at three health centres.

The table below shows how patients evaluated differnet services at three health centres.
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The table compares and contrasts patient
ratings
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for five different
services
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in three various
health
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centres .
Overall
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, most patients recommended the
services
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provided by Peveril
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health
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Health
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Centre
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as more satisfying.
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, the least rating was given
for
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to
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Kingston
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centre
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Centre
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.
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with, most people believe the Peveril
centre
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as
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the best
health
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care
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centre
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with
a
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overall
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rating of 8.5 , and the Highest satisfying rating was given for Booking appointments and responses to concerns, and it recorded 9.1 and 9.6
ratings
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respectively.
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,
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other
services
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like doctors'
services
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and
care
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for children reported 8.7 and 7.6 satisfaction ratios ' .
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, the least rating in the
centre
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was provided to the pharmacy with a 6.3 rating. Meanwhile , the March Bank
centre
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accounted second most satisfying
service
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centre
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among the patients and data illustrates that doctors'
service
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was the best
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in the institutions , with
an
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apply
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8.4
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ratings
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rating
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.
While
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, 7.8 and 7.3
rating
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ratings
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were given for Booking appointments and
care
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of children , and 6.5 stars were provided to respond to concerns.
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, the lowest rating was for pharmacy , which was 5.8 .
Lingston
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Kingston
Livingston
Centre
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was the less satisfying
health
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centre
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compared to the other three centres , and it accounted
overall
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rating of 5.8 only .
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, doctors'
services
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was
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the most popular
service
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in
lingston
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Kingston
Livingston
Arlington
centre
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, with
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an
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8.0 rating, and a 6.3 satisfaction value was given for the
care
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of children .
However
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, other
services
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like booking appointments , pharmacy and response to concern only constituted below 5
ratings
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respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, whereas, while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words ratings, services, health, centre, care, service with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 3 times.
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