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Working abroad can help employees earn a great deal of money and gain more benefits however, some people think this trend has many negative impacts. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working abroad.

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time
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 some
people
 go to abroad-other countries to
work
. It can help earn a great deal of money. Some
people
 think
this
work
 has negative impacts. On the one hand, when
people
 go
ro
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to
 abroad to
work
 they can earn money and
this
useful
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their
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 life because they can start
own
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their own
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 business. If they want to have good
work
 and they think that go to other countries.
On the other hand
, if
people
 are working abroad and they miss their family and friends. So it will be bad
at
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 their life.Some
people
have
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not
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no
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 family so they think
anything
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of anything
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 and anybody. They can
work
 there easily.
To conclude
, considering the aforementioned points it can be inferred that all countries have to own
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job
jobs
 and works.
Then
 some
people
 do not
need
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 go to
work
 abroad.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional growth
  • Cultural shock
  • Remittances
  • Global networking
  • Expatriate
  • Brain drain
  • Reverse culture shock
  • Cross-cultural communication
  • Exploitation
  • Professional migration
  • Economic benefits
  • Bilateral agreements
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