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Some people think city planners should create more green spaces and plant trees. Others believe that they should focus on building new houses. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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These days
people
 rarely dedicate
time
 to their
hobbies
. In my opinion, it happens
as a result
 of the busyness of
life
 and leads to problems with mental health. Modern society prizes professional achievements and
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being a part of it, it can leave little
time
 to pursue your
hobbies
.
Moreover
, everyone's day is full of different activities,
such
 as work, education, gatherings with friends, and chores.
People
 occupy every second of their lives to meet the demand to be productive. With all these essential tasks and a need to do as much as they can, to be successful in
life
,
people
 forget the importance to please themselves with the proper rest and things that bring them joy.
In addition
,
lack
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 of
time
 devoted to
hobbies
 can take a toll on the mental stability of the individual.
Hobbies
 help to alleviate stress by keeping you engaged in something you relish and by supplying you with the feeling of
fulfillment
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.
Moreover
, it increases confidence, eliminates boredom and enriches
life
.
Consequently
, their absence can result in a burn-out, as
human
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 is constantly involved in activities that are associated with work or other responsibilities. By continuing
this
 way of
life
, depression may develop in many
people
. Eventually, if there will be a great number of
people
 with depression or a burn-out, society may stagnate and feel hollow. In conclusion, it is very important to have
hobbies
 and make
time
 for them. It is good to leave your thoughts sometimes and just please yourself with things that make you happy
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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