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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the graph compares the average percentages in typical meals of
three
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 different
types
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 of
nutrients
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, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
it is clear that
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 the
percentage
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 in dinner of
three
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 different
types
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 of
three
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 was the largest in these four meals
while
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 the
percentage
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 in breakfast of
three
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types
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 of
nutrients
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 was the smallest among the other
three
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 meals. for dinner , the average
percentage
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 of sodium was the highest at 45%
while
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 the number of saturated
nutrients
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 was 37%,and the figure for added
sugar
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nutrients
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 was 23%.for snacks ,the
percentage
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 of added
sugar
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 was the largest in the other two
types
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 was 43% but the figure for sodium was the smallest at 14%. for breakfast , the average
percentage
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 of saturated fat was the same as the
percentage
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 of added
sugar
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 at 16%,and the number of other
types
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 at 14%.for lunch , the number of
three
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types
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 of
nutrients
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 was 29% sodium,26%saturated fat and 19%added
sugar
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 .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, types, nutrients, percentage, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 7 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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