Your local council is closing the children’s playground in your locality as not many children visit the park. Write a letter to the council requesting not to close it. Include the following in your letter: – How important is the playground for children? – Why don’t children go to the playground? – What can be done to bring children back to the park?

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Dear city council, I am writing a letter to beg you not to close the
children
’s
playground
in our locality. The
playground
is
the
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a
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significant place for the vast majority of people including
a
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children
a child
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children
and an adult. The
playground
was
build
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as
the
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a
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place not only where the
children
are able to play,
also
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but also
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where
a
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apply
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parents watch and look after their
children
while
they are having fun in a
playground
. Having a
playground
in our locality has
the
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a
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significant meaning, the
children
are able to play and
fun
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have fun
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with their friends.
Then
it could be
a precious childhood memories
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a precious childhood memory
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for them.
In addition
, having a
playground
make
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makes
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the adolescent stay active.
Due to
widely
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the widely
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trending
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trend
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of using mobile
phone
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phones
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,
the
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apply
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adolescent
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adolescents
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tend to stay more inactive than
playing in
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when they play
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outside nowadays. It could be
better
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a better
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improvement for their wellness as well. From my point of view, the
playground
should
be remain
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in our locality. Please consider my opinion. Sincerely,
Submitted by summer.na.9678 on

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task response
Address the specific points in the prompt clearly and thoroughly.
coherence and cohesion
Use appropriate paragraphing and cohesive devices to organize your ideas more clearly.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use more appropriate and precise language to convey your ideas effectively.
grammatical range
Work on using a wider range of grammatical structures and ensure accurate use of grammar throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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