The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphs indicate the changes in
Use synonyms
population
of local residents and immigrants who live in different Add an article
the population
a population
areas
in Australia between 1995 and 2010.
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Overall
, the majority of Linking Words
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population
in Australia Add an article
the population
are locate
in cities, in which the number continued Change the verb form
are located
increased
over Change the verb form
to increase
surveyed
period, compared to the decremental Add an article
the surveyed
population
in towns and rural Use synonyms
areas
.
First of all, the number of oversea residents in cities Use synonyms
were
10 Correct subject-verb agreement
was
thousand
more than local people in 1995, in which the former surged to 80 Use synonyms
thousand
, and the latter went up to 65 Use synonyms
thousands
in 2010.
Change to singular
thousand
On the other hand
, towns and rural Linking Words
areas
indicated an opposite trend during surveyed years. There were more Use synonyms
immigrands
in rural Correct your spelling
immigrants
areas
than local people at 40 and 30 Use synonyms
thousand
in 1995, Use synonyms
however
, the situation reversed in 2010, Linking Words
while
the Linking Words
population
of residents from overseas experienced a Use synonyms
drastice
shrink to half of those who Correct your spelling
drastic
born
in Australia. On top of that, there were more local individuals Add a missing verb
were born
live
in town regions, despite that the number experienced a Wrong verb form
living
continue
drop to less than 20 Wrong verb form
continued
thousand
.Use synonyms
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