The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphs indicate the changes in
population
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the population
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of local residents and immigrants who live in different
areas
in Australia between 1995 and 2010.
Overall
, the majority of
population
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the population
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in Australia
are locate
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are located
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in cities, in which the number continued
increased
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to increase
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over
surveyed
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the surveyed
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period, compared to the decremental
population
in towns and rural
areas
. First of all, the number of oversea residents in cities
were
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was
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10
thousand
more than local people in 1995, in which the former surged to 80
thousand
, and the latter went up to 65
thousands
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thousand
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in 2010.
On the other hand
, towns and rural
areas
indicated an opposite trend during surveyed years. There were more
immigrands
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immigrants
in rural
areas
than local people at 40 and 30
thousand
in 1995,
however
, the situation reversed in 2010,
while
the
population
of residents from overseas experienced a
drastice
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drastic
shrink to half of those who
born
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were born
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in Australia. On top of that, there were more local individuals
live
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living
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in town regions, despite that the number experienced a
continue
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continued
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drop to less than 20
thousand
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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