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Employers should give their staff at least 4 weeks' holiday every year to make them perform better at their jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People live in a fast-paced and competitive environment, and employers know how important it is to give their workers sufficient
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 off. Some believe that a minimum of 4
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' break per year can improve job performance,
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 others argue that it is unnecessary. From my perspective, I fully agree that employers should give their staff at least four
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 of
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 off every year to help them perform better at their jobs.
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mental and physical workers should have at least four
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' holidays to nurse their bodies and supplement sleep to improve immunity. Taking a break from
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 can reduce stress, improve mental health, and increase job satisfaction, leading to a more motivated workforce. Research has
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 shown that people are more productive when they return to
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 after a long holiday.
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, holidays can reunite employees with their families. They look after their children and provide meals for their family members. At the same
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, they
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 have hours to recharge themselves and do what they want to do. Employees feel the company's care, They will effort harder than ever and take the initiative to produce overtime after being returned to
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.
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 some argue that four
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 of holidays per year may be too much, it is remembered that employees need adequate
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 to rest and recuperate. Even though three
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 of vacation might seem like an amount, it might not be enough
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 to get away from
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 and relax.
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, five
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 or more may be too long and cause anxiety or guilt at
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, which could lead to poor job performance.
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