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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single sex or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, choosing the right school for children is gaining popularity in ambiguous parts of
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society. With the autonomy of choosing mixed-gender or single-gender classrooms, the parents are debating their choices.
However
, some feel that the children attending single-sexed schools may suffer in the future years of their life. In
this
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 of students.
To begin
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 can drastically change their confidence level
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Although
, the pupil in the learning institutions are taught how to talk with manners
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socialising with someone of the opposite sex can bring a little hesitation leading to not
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 able to present their ideas well.
For instance
, a girl studying in
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 girls" college may find it hard to make guy friends .
Therefore
, children from
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socialise in
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 unisex environment.
Secondly
,
this
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. Most people from
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single-sex schools might find it hard to form a relationship with other genders as they might consider it a wrong thing.
For example
, in countries like India, especially during the old times, girls who had friends from opposite genders were judged as
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bad
person
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.
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same gender
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schools
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 the thinking process continues to be like the old times. To wrap up, I strongly agree education can work wonders to groom a human being boy having the right atmosphere and multi-gender environment around can prepare the individual
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 every situation.
Therefore
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 learning
system
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 should be considered by adults
while
 preparing the child's future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interpersonal skills
  • misconceptions
  • stereotypes
  • co-educational schooling
  • tailored curriculum
  • STEM fields
  • humanities
  • sexual harassment
  • safer learning environment
  • mixed-gender contexts
  • social development
  • diverse workplaces
  • professional relationships
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