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Since some children do not seem to have natural abilities to learn a language. School should not force students to learn a foreign language . How far do you agree with the statement?

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It has been argued by many individuals that a few sections of people do not have the natural power to acquire a different dialect and educational institutes ought to be not to force learners to grasp overseas
languages
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. I totally accord with
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 a reasoned conclusion. Foremost, the fundamental cause behind my disagreement
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 necessary for natural abilities to learn the native
languages
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 is that where people are born they
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 know their mother tongue because they spend
their
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all the time with their family members, friends and even relatives who speak that
language
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, so it is easy for them to memorize.
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, a survey conducted by Harward University revealed that 75% of
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Indians have more ability to speak their native
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 with the assistance of their guardians and peers because they talk in that
language
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 they have familiar with it.
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, students have more pressure
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 their academic subjects
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 as Mathematics, Biology, History and Science so
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 why they may not focus on learning other foreign
languages
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.
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, it is published an article by The Tribune newspaper showed that approximately 55% of the learners are getting not good marks in their education because
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schools are focusing on teaching overseas
languages
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.
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 people can grasp
language
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 from loved ones with their natural power, if they emphasise acquiring other country
languages
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, they might fail in their examination.
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