The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided bar chart compares attendance at entertainment
venues
while
the table gives information about the
entrance
prices for these
venues
in the year 2009.
Overall
, Cinemas were the most attended
venues
having the least
entrance
fee whilst Sports
venues
were the least visited with the highest
entrance
cost. In
details
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, Sports
venues
were the least attended
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among other
venues
with about 150 thousand visitors.
However
, the prices for these
venues
were the most expensive except for Cricked games. All tickets for Football Games (AFL, NRL and NRU) were around $70 and about $285 for a family of 4 people. Basketball and Cricket games were quite cheap with $34 and $24 per person and $135 and $180 for Family tickets. Looking into non-sport
venues
, Cinemas were the most popular among other entertainment
venues
with more than 1 million visitors. But prices for cinemas were the cheapest
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among all events with only $15 per ticket and $55 for a Family of 4 people. When it comes to Theme Parks, they were the second both in attendance and pricing with almost 400 thousand people visiting it and having
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70
entrance
fee per person
as well as
$210 for Family Ticket.
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