The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
the table illustrates the consumption of people in five countries in 2010.
it is clear that
,
the maximal percentage of costs Remove the comma
apply
was belonged
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belonged
has belonged
for
feeds and Tobacco Change preposition
to
while
, there was a
lowest proportion for Change the article
the
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a tutorial
the tutorial
tutorial
in 2010.
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tutorials
according to
these statistics, the highest amount of feeds
, drinks and tobacco was in Turkey about 32%, though, Sweden was Fix the agreement mistake
feed
minimal
amount of Add an article
a minimal
the minimal
this
factor with less than 16 % also
, this
static was 16.36% in Italy. additionally
, 28.91% and 18.80% were belonged
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belonged
have belonged
for
Irland and Spain respectively.
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to
in addition
, the amount of lecture
and teaching in Turkey was a significant decline in the period in question and stood at just 4.35%. Fix the agreement mistake
lectures
moreover
, the minimum percent
of education Replace the word
percentage
was belonged
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belonged
has belonged
for
Spain Change preposition
to
with
less than 2%. Change preposition
at
also
, in Italy and Sweden about 3.2% of revenue Add a missing verb
is paied
paied
for clothing and footwear. Correct your spelling
paid
besides
, all percentages of apparel were between 5.4% for Sweden and 9% for Italy.Submitted by amirhsina on
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